A phone call and a mourning

Firmly jelled to my dormitory bed ,determined not to receive it again,  I count the phone ring in the corridor –  .. two , three….

‘Come on Anita, freshers can’t be choosers’, commands the stout, bespectacled senior , rudely barging in,minus a knock.

I couldn’t wait to be a non-fresher and be done with the obligatory phone attendant duty.


The attendant in the old age home politely  knocks and gently points to the  ringing red phone on my table.

‘… Miss Anita,sorry about your loss’, pours  the concerned stranger into the mouthpiece.

Those dormitory days appear, sunny.

I wait for a happy messenger .



Word count- 98

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle. Thanks Rochelle for hosting the challenge.

PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll













49 thoughts on “A phone call and a mourning

    • Thanks so much , Rochelle. I really appreciate your reading through and encouraging my humble attempts at FF. Means a lot to me.
      Best regards,


  1. Dear Moon, Hello, hello 😊
    Love the way you have juxtaposed Anita’s two different phases. The two contrasting moments and the melancholy of old age.
    Very well written.
    Love ❤️

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  2. Well done! So it usually goes: we don’t know when we have it good until we look back from a different place.
    A mom once told me her teen girls complained how hard she made them work. Then they got married and became farm wives and moms — and realized their teen years had been a picnic.

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  3. A lovely, gentle, rather sad story. I like the diptych structure. Using the telephone as the link between the two phases of life is inspired, because it’s plainly an institutional phone of some kind, and at beginning and end she’s in an institution. Very cleverly done, Moon. Nice writing!

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